1st Quarter Poetry Journal Reflection

Rain.


(She's)     (the)    (reason)     (my)    (hair)   
(goes  )    (on)     (a)      (rage.) 
(She's)   (like)   (an)   (evil)    (witch) 
  (of)   (the)   (west)  but)   (the)    (World's.) 
(But)    (then)    (again)    (She's) (one)    (of)    (the) 
(main)  (reasons)    (I'm)    (still)    (breathing)     (today.)
(She's)       (my)    (mother)   (without)   (the)    (nagging)
(But)   (boy)    (could)    (she)   (put)   (up) (a) (fight.)
(Everyone)    (shakes)    (when)    (she's)    (ANGRY!)
(Drip.)      (Thunder.)    (Thunder.)



I chose this poem that I made, because I thought I was pretty darn creative. Don't you think?
The parenthesis around each word is supposed to look like rain though at a glance looks
like a BIG mistake, haha. I like this piece owing to the fact that it, not only show cases my creative brain (thank you mom and dad, love you) it also personifies mother nature as a person (and as my mother). I added more lengthier descriptions into my work, despite the fact that this already looks pretty cut short, you should see my draft! I also did more changes into punctuation besides the normal periods that are absolutely everywhere and show no emotion, because life is a boring line. 

The poem I used as reference as did an image for it's base, forget who wrote it specifically but he wrote it to be a staircase!

(real live footage of me at last week's football game)

Laptop

After a long day of lectures I come home back to my silver Dell laptop.
No, it wasn't from the shops yesterday— actually it looks like something in a museum case ancient, old.
I flip open crackling sounds and hear her mumbling as her LOADING tattoo close up.
I open a colorful webpage and start to read. 87% battery.
I turn the page and she yells "10% battery. Please find the nearest power source or device will shut down."

Again? She is so annoying. Ugh!
she sits on a Paris inspired bag and wastes space and electricity.
But what can I do? She gets my assignments done.

I chose this entry specifically because it is literally ME every time I have assignment online and my only outlet is my laptop. Again, I try used personification with my laptop. I didn't really do much editing to this piece besides exaggerating my battery life by a little and added that "Ugh!" because I think most people can hear that voice, that voice saying "Ugh!"

The poetry piece I mentored off of was a describing his grubby car and how disgusting it was but it was almost like his second home. And to that, the poet illustrates how gross his car is and how its filled with trash but in the end it does him good and is his home. My poem is how slow and annoying my laptop is but in the end, I can't finish my assignments and get good grades without it!

(When my battery runs out, and I'm in the middle of writing something I didn't save)